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cold world infected -2- by ~Angeliq:iconAngeliq:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark




the ground vibrating under feet of sinners
the dolls watch my blood run...so fast,
faster,faster,faster it beats,it breaks...
my veins are burning,I'm defeated
I kiss the street,I kiss the rain
it doesn't kiss me back...

search for love where there is none
in arms all red and torn in half
and we still hope to find some
still hope some...
breath is fading into nothing,
...then it's fading back again...

I can't wake from this dream myself,
my thoughts...they disappear...
fascinated by emptyness
...could stay like this forever
I soar...upon all my wounds and scars...
and my bleeding heart...
I forget my stomach ache...

...for seconds I am dead...

and then I live again...
enchanted by a whisper,
a trace of sound in empty air
worth living for
©2004-2009 ~Angeliq
:iconangeliq:

Author's Comments

...some stuff I wrote about my past addiction.

The pic is about 2 years old. I made it for a guy I liked,but he didn't want it (sounds so stupid...as I felt then...). Well. I like it.

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~solafide Jan 19, 2004, 3:39:17 PM
Very powerful - there's some real emotion behind this poem. You communicate it well, which is always impressive. Only thing I'd say is that the line breaks work against this because they break the flow of the piece - makes it seem a bit disjointed. But hey, maybe that's just me, and you shouldn't pay too much attention to what I say anyhow ;) . Whatever - it's a good poem nonetheless, so kudos to you :).
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~Discanthus Jan 19, 2004, 7:44:08 PM
Wow. To have come from such a dark time in your own life and then go as far as not only to write about it but share it with the world truly is a depiction of the strength that you've been able to harness within yourself. You should be veyr proud of yourself. With the usual professional flair you have let the imagestic vocabulary of your words lift the reader away to your time. Great work

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Chris Your Friendly Neighbourhood Psycho
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~fu-rin-ka-zan Jan 19, 2004, 8:57:43 PM
wow...that is very powerful...great job! ur eloquence profounds me...(erk! sorry for the unnecessarily big words...)

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^i have been programmed to say that...

don't ya wish the edit-undo command applied to real life? :slow:

:gallery: visit mine! (please?)
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~patata Jan 20, 2004, 11:34:51 AM
I do like it...

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~jystal Jan 21, 2004, 2:44:35 PM
Your poems are so deep, i love the way you relate to religion in some of them... :floating: :rose: :matrixfight:
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