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Fading with the tide

My heart has never felt more weight
Under all my masks I hide that
A world that never understood the way I live
Will understand the way I die

My eyes are bleeding,tears are salty
I drink them just to bleed some more
A world that never understood the way I laugh
Will understand the way I cry

My teeth they fall apart from overdose heartbeat
A underline that took me in to kill and grind
A world that never understood the way I see
Will understand me when Im blind

In bed with those black eyes and blood red wine
I fall once more just to repeat the last date
A world that never understood the way I love
Will understand how much I hate

In my breast there flows the acid rendering my state of mind
The steel makes butterflies appear around my tomb
A world that never understood the way I feel
Will stab me with a kinfe when I am numb
©2004-2009 ~Angeliq
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This was one of those things I wrote late at night when I became all teenage-anxious...very emotional indeed...

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:iconcausticgit:
Wow... I love the last lines of each stanza... I love the meaning...

There are quite a few lil errors, though (the way I lough?). I would love to go through this with you way more thoroughly, and even ask you to submit it, on the message board and ezine I run.

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Yes, it is a plug. ;) Honestly, I really like it, and I'd love to see you there.
:iconkaterz1313:
this is great!!!!!!!!!!! i love how it ends, the contrast. very well put together and a masterpeice it is

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:iconangeliq:
I joined the board (though your link was leading me to 'damn>s<pens' (?))...btw,thanks for the spellcheck ^^ (no irony), should have been "laugh" not 'lough'...you can put it onto the e-zine if you think it's worth it 6.6' ...^^

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wow...das a great poem...honestly i don't thing great is the right word...but i'm too stunned to think of a better one...

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^i have been programmed to say that...

don't ya wish the edit-undo command applied to real life? :slow:

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:icondiscanthus:
Very interestingly composed. It's neat to see you begin each stanza with a steady fluidity throughout, and even more interesting as i realize that I myself recently wrote a poem which touches on such things as the heart and eyes, the sense of the body. It's always a great base t use in writing and brings about most interesting results

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Chris Your Friendly Neighbourhood Psycho
:iconcausticgit:
@.@ Bloody 'ell... I knew I should have copied the link instead of typing it by hand... I'm sorry!! ^^;; Glad you could find us, though. I really, really do think it's good enough for the 'zine. Just copy it into a new thread in Submit To The Zine and it'll go in the next issue.

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